In this business letter that I found, I find the format to be appropriate in this situation. In the letter, the president of SavbizCor Ltd is thanking Ms. Edwards, the financial manager of Barnelli Ltd, for the excellent job that the company did in arranging financing for SavbizCor's project. Dixie Cleverelle clearly states how they were impressed with all their knowledge of financing and investment banking. The writer was very specific to their reasoning as to why the letter was written; Ms. Edwards was being thanked for her company's actions and told they would not hesitate to recommend her firm to any other company seeking the best representation. Everything was clearly written and it was right to the point. The grammar was correct and the word structure was written in a business format matter.
Wednesday, September 14, 2011
I don’t agree with the fact that businesses make their websites using overly formal, corporate-speak. I feel that if a company is making their website for the viewing of it’s consumers, they should keep their sentences and advertisements short and simple. If I were on a website and it was hard for me to understand the writing, I wouldn’t waste my time trying to figure out what it says. Therefore, I feel that I can speak for all customers when I say that we like our websites to be easy to understand and easy to navigate. Maybe companies still continue to do this for the purpose of other companies seeing it. Companies who are rivals, compete against each other by who has the better structured website. There are two different reasons for making a website by a company: for the viewing and consuming of potential customers, and for competition of other rivaling companies.
Monday, September 12, 2011
In the attached inter-office e-mail, there are a few spelling errors, which are probably because it was from an insurance firm in England. However, this seems to be an email regarding changes within this certain business. These changes can and should be explained a little more clear and available to be read by multiple readers. This specific email would have sufficed with the use of short words, which would make it easier for everyone who is reading it to be able to comprehend. There are also many technical words and initials, which are difficult to understand sometimes.
- LinkedIn Blog- The first blog about the company LinkedIn was very interesting. It showed just about every fun and informational event and assignment this guy was a part of. I liked a lot of what he was saying, but what I enjoyed the most was when he told us that every Thursday someone shares what they are working on to everyone, and they get feedback. This is a prime example in business communication face-to-face. This man was getting feedback from his co-workers; positive or negative, feedback is always a good thing!
- Zappos Blog- I especially liked the blog about Zappos because it showed more than just how the business was ran. This blog explained everything leading up to the business, and more. It was refreshing to read something that someone wrote where they were so joyful and happy about their own company.
- Whole Foods Blog- I am in love with this blog! Not only does it show what the company is about, but it gives a demonstration with instructions on how to do something to make a small, positive difference in the world. The next blog by Whole Foods is also great. They are promoting their company in such a healthy, giving way.